Place and Time Workshop

Sam -Personal Essay

Her Dialogue was very fitting, it was clear who was talking and the formatting was great. As well as the plot, we got a before, present, and developed it on so we got the full spectrum of the event. I wanted to see a little more development in her feelings so I could understand/feel more of what she was feeling in that present moment.

And then (sorry forgot her name :(, ) I read my other peers paper about the ball-wall room, and I loved the imagery, it made it a very interesting piece where I wanted to keep reading, I just wanted to see her go back and dive into her families feelings about her and Lacrosse and how that changed since she started with that.